This is really, really good, Ames. I mean really good. Not that I don't love everything you write, but you just ... you capture something really special here. Just lovely.
Who took one of his hands and held it, brushing his thumb over the knuckles. They sat like that for a while, and it was odd, but nice. For two teenage boys, it was about the best he figured they could do in terms of emotional support, and Xander was suitably impressed. I love this bit, because teenage boys really can be so closed off with each other like this. But then you turn it with the kiss to the hand and it's perfect. And the timidness of both of them.
"Oh thank god, fuck" - Brilliant. That little bit of dialogue says so much -- it tells us about Larry's motivations, it tells us the hesitancy between them, it tells Xander everything he needs to know (for the moment anyway). And that way he mutters it against Xander's mouth, so hot and I can just feel the way the pace of things shifts dramatically all coming out of this line. It's so much better than if Larry just kissed him back.
The exploration with hands and the reminder to be quiet and Larry keeping him there in the bed are all lovely and tender and just wonderful.
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Date: 2005-07-11 08:46 pm (UTC)Who took one of his hands and held it, brushing his thumb over the knuckles. They sat like that for a while, and it was odd, but nice. For two teenage boys, it was about the best he figured they could do in terms of emotional support, and Xander was suitably impressed. I love this bit, because teenage boys really can be so closed off with each other like this. But then you turn it with the kiss to the hand and it's perfect. And the timidness of both of them.
"Oh thank god, fuck" - Brilliant. That little bit of dialogue says so much -- it tells us about Larry's motivations, it tells us the hesitancy between them, it tells Xander everything he needs to know (for the moment anyway). And that way he mutters it against Xander's mouth, so hot and I can just feel the way the pace of things shifts dramatically all coming out of this line. It's so much better than if Larry just kissed him back.
The exploration with hands and the reminder to be quiet and Larry keeping him there in the bed are all lovely and tender and just wonderful.